Deep POV--Lesson 1.1 What is Deep POV? Jun 18, 2021 13:32:12 GMT -6 RAVENEYE, Alatariel, and 1 more like this
Post by ScienceGirl on Jun 18, 2021 13:32:12 GMT -6
Every week as I consider my best writing resources, I'm continually drawn to my eBook library. This week, I asked myself which book improved my writing style the most?
Hands down, it was a book called Rivet Your Readers with Deep POV by Jill Elizabeth Nelson. She asks in her tagline, "Want your readers to crawl inside your book and live there?" I remember answering this question with a resounding YES!!! as I downloaded the book to my Kindle.
Later, I purchased a paper copy so I could study it deeper and write in the margins. I wanted to do as she said, and create a sense of intimacy and immediacy with my readers. Deep POV turned out to be the perfect method to do that. I'd like to share the ideas with you over a few posts.
A few things to consider as you're first trying it out.
1. A lot of people don't understand deep POV. When I participated in critique forums (not this one), people would tell me I needed to use italics or that it wasn't appropriate grammar. However, incomplete sentences are ACCEPTABLE in our thoughts! It can be a really effective way to add tension and suspense.
2. You cannot head-hop with this method in a scene. It's a DISASTER if you don't stay in the mind of one character. So, you need some kind of visual break (like *** or an image) to signal to readers that someone else is doing the thinking.
3. Overwrite the thoughts and edit them back. You'll be glad you did because you will truly KNOW your characters.
So, without further ado, let's dive into chapter 1! I have no idea how many lessons this will be LOL so we'll call it:
Nelson first goes into an explanation of the basics of point of view. She says:
So remember that this should be established through a single character's psyche. It IS acceptable to write a book with multiple POV characters. It is NOT acceptable to head-hop within scenes. She defines this point-of-view character as the POVC.
The term point of view is defined as a position from which something is considered or evaluated, a standpoint, or a place of perception.
She further states:
In order to remain firmly inside the POVC's head, nothing in a scene can be presented for reader consideration that is outside of the character's awareness.
Tires screeched, car doors scraped, and horns blared as a Mustang and an SUV collided behind Amelia. Distracted by the sound, she subconsciously let go of the stack of books she was holding, and they fell to the ground. She winced, and the corner of a heavy book struck her big toe.
1) Can Amelia know what happens behind her as fact? Can she see the two cars? Does she know their doors scraped? Would that be a side-by-side collision? What assumptions does she make here and what does she physically observe?
2) In her subconscious, would Amelia know she was letting go of the stack of books? This makes it seem like she's dropping them on purpose.
3) When does she realize she's dropped the books? If you're in her POV and she's subconsciously dropping them, she wouldn't realize they've dropped until they've fell. She would feel the book hit her toe before that knowledge occurs to her.
So, consider a rewrite where we a) plant thoughts into Amelia's head to lead us to her assumptions and b) we only write from an angle of what she directly hears, smells, tastes, touches, and feels.
Tires screeched, metal scraped, and horns blared. Another car crash? They had to fix this road! Amelia winced as a sharp and heavy object struck her big toe. The rest of the textbooks tumbled out of her arms to the ground.
Now, let's look at the pieces we've assembled here:
Tires screeched, metal scraped and horns blared. This is what Amelia definitely hears. Does she know by the screeching that it's tires? I think so because that's a distinct, familiar sound. She wouldn't know which parts of the car scraped, but it would definitely sound like metal.
Another car crash? They had to fix this road! Here are your deep POV thoughts. No italics. Incomplete sentence, fine. Readers will know (as long as you use the technique consistently) that these are Amelia's thoughts.
Amelia winced as a sharp and heavy object struck her big toe. Notice the use of as here rather than and. These two actions would happen simultaneously. Does it make sense for her to wince before the book hits? Of course not, unless she's psychic.
The rest of the textbooks tumbled out of her arms to the ground. This, she could see.
Try it out! Ye brave souls write a brief (2-3 sentences) and revise in deep POV. Respond to this thread with them and I'll have a look and respond to you in a PM.
Next time, we'll explore Deep POV from the first-person angle.