YA Fiction - Short Story Dialogue Excerpt
Sept 19, 2022 13:43:58 GMT -6
Post by alliecartman248 on Sept 19, 2022 13:43:58 GMT -6
Moving this here because it fits better. This is a short except of some dialogue from a (realistic, YA) fiction story I wrote. Just looking for general advice to improve it. Not far enough along with the story to give more context of the overall story yet.
I turned to Emily and said, “You know, I really hate people who don’t like movies like this.”
We had To All The Boys I’ve Loved Before playing, quiet enough to not wake my roommate in the bed next to us.
“They have their reasons,” she burst out, the laughter in her voice barely contained and giving me a look that told me she knew those people and talked to them about how bad these movies were quite often.
I loved talking movies and books with friends. Real life was hard for me, the edges too sharp, the risks too high. Made-up worlds offered a gentler option, a safer space to discuss everything.
“Okay, so one of the things people criticize about YA romcoms is that the girls can never tell what they’re experiencing when they get the hots for a guy. But I feel like it’s hard for me to tell the difference between platonic and nonplatonic feelings, and that’s actually a realistic representation.”
Emily paused, contemplating.
I turned to Emily and said, “You know, I really hate people who don’t like movies like this.”
We had To All The Boys I’ve Loved Before playing, quiet enough to not wake my roommate in the bed next to us.
“They have their reasons,” she burst out, the laughter in her voice barely contained and giving me a look that told me she knew those people and talked to them about how bad these movies were quite often.
I loved talking movies and books with friends. Real life was hard for me, the edges too sharp, the risks too high. Made-up worlds offered a gentler option, a safer space to discuss everything.
“Okay, so one of the things people criticize about YA romcoms is that the girls can never tell what they’re experiencing when they get the hots for a guy. But I feel like it’s hard for me to tell the difference between platonic and nonplatonic feelings, and that’s actually a realistic representation.”
Emily paused, contemplating.
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